Editorially, I’d recommend breaking up some of the paragraphs. The current paragraphs aren’t super long in the grand scheme of things, but your subject matter complex.
For intellectual subject matter like this, it helps to give the reader a break more often—to chunk the information.
Notice that I’ve made this feedback into multiple paragraphs, even though it’s only a few sentences, since the subject matter is abstract.
If you’re interested in more on this topic, the best resource I’ve read on writing is Steven Pinker’s “The Sense of Style”. Strongly recommended.
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